iKïyå§ama - thanks so much for running this activity, for this comment and for the lovely MB!
I'm glad I saw your reminder (I'd missed the first newsfeed post somehow!) and participated.
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
This is an acrostic poem with a festivals theme.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the accompanying video. It helped to frame the poem for me so I had more context and understanding.
STRUCTURE
This is an acrostic poem that used "MADNESS OF MARCH." From Websters: a composition usually in verse in which sets of letters (such as the initial or final letters of the lines) taken in order form a word or phrase or a regular sequence of letters of the alphabet
The poem caught the excitement and fun of the video.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to highlight the beginning letters.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Magical, Mundane, Mysterious, Magnificent," All descriptions in and of themselves, but what visual descriptions and they evoke a lot of emotion from interesting, daring, exhilarating and even a yawn.
Such a sweet little short story; I'm sure the judge had a really difficult time choosing the winner for that edition of "The Writer's Cramp - Poetry Week" . Choosing to live alone is one thing, but also having to endure all the memories and recurring events by yourself is tough.
I'm offering these comments on Stay True to Yourself, a fabulous little verse in both senses of the word, which you posted on I Write.
It was a joy for me to savour these words of wisdom, delivered in the indisputably authentic voice of the feathered sage of fable him (or her) self. The rhymes and rhythms are direct and simple, befitting the message they convey and I particularly appreciated your signature touch - 'whooo' - which told me this could only be the work of one poet.
Much enjoyed, as ever, and I wish you success in the contest!
Today I went to the GPO (General Post Office) to collect three special cancelations - Civil Service Day, Earth Day and Panchayat Day.
I think I managed to get the correct cards correctly stamped and correctly mailed, in all the confusion of there being three!
Then I went to Divya's place. Met her new cat, Spice, for the first time. Spice let me pat her, and then hid in her toy tunnel and peeked out at me and we played peek-a-boo. Divya's earlier cat, Sugar, was having a nap. Spice is new and Sugar and Spice haven't yet started getting along. They are kept in different rooms and are being gradually introduced to each other.
Divya has embarked on a stray-animal project to get vets to come and examine the stray dogs / cats / other strays around on a regular basis. Please pray that this project takes off and does well!
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