Hah! That's an interesting premise indeed.
Not sure about celebrating the birthday's twice in a year though. It's hard enough getting through one alone!
Fun read all around!
My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.
THE POEM
The poem took a look at the properties of a mountain.
WHAT I LIKED
As the poem began, I could see myself in a helicopter, flying over the mountain, making my assessments. Great way to put the reader in the moment.
STRUCTURE
This is a diamante poem. The rules involve having 7 seven lines, first and last line, just one word which is a noun, 2nd and 6th lines, 2 words which are adjectives, 3rd and 5th lines have 3 words which are verbs, 4th line has 4 words - nouns. Diamantes don't have to play hard by the rules, but they should take the shape of a diamond.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easier to read on WDC.
DESCRIPTIONS
The words used to describe this mountain really gave the mountain it's own look and personality. The use of the word "aiguille," I found an inspired word choice and I had to look it up for it's meaning.
PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS
The opening sets the stage for what to expect from the poem. The title, "Diamonds in the Hills," can be used for the obvious - the mountain is the diamond, but it's word "aiguille" that really fills out the description and makes the diamond take form and shape. Nice word play and expression. The poem followed the prompt and used one of the following words: mountain, beach, or forest. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.
A beautiful story and memorial told in a personal experience way. Thanks for sharing this and glad I found this 😁! 🎖️🇺🇸🚂🚉.
I love trains and as a kid thought I'd be a conductor on the Ny subway system.
Thanks for your story for the Bard's Hall July 2025 contest. You did a good job incorporating the photo prompt into your story. There were good emotional elements in the story that tapped into the heartstrings. The story was sweet, inspirational and ended on a hopeful note. Well done!
Excellent story you have written. As I looked at the picture, I could see the inspiration coming. What could be better than having the same birthday as our wonderful country. Truly enjoyed reading it.
My father's fathers, first came to America back in 1607, and we have been living and dying for our country ever since. My 8th great-grandfather, John Thomas Clark, gave his all in 1623 in an American Indian attack outside what was Jamestown.
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