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 | Simply a Book  [E] A poem about an old book given to me by my Grandfather  |
| (4.5)| Welcome to WDC Carole Rae!! I am happy to do a review to celebrate you!   I just love old books and your title caught my attention from the Read A Newbie page. The evocative idea of "simply" a book is awesome and made me think it means more than just that. I thought of all the ways a book can be meaningful. I was not disappointed!! This poem is so heartfelt and really showed the impact of that book and the connection with your grandfather with potency. The images are so vivid and real I could enter into the experience.  Brilliant! The poem is free style, which suits the theme and emotional content and I felt the drama in it in the way you had short lines and line breaks. Punctuation assisted the read in a meaningful way as well. a few ideas you might consider: ~~I read that one doesn't need too many ands as joiners in poetry as it is a bit weak and takes the potency from more vital words. so see how it flows if you take out the "and" before "slightly torn" and before "No longer soft". you could use commas for pause. I just found that you have quite a few "ands" beginning lines. Just a POV! ~~I am not sure you need to say "which smells " after the line about cologne as we will get the connection without the wordiness. Just "like the forest in spring.." will suffice. Yet perhaps you want the emphasis.  I loved the word "cracks" and the metaphor of winter and the combination or "ages And dust" the "and" works here well.  Your description of the book as you treasure it is sensual and lends reality to the memory. I am truly moved by this expression--timeless and a wonderful tribute to grandfather and literature as well. It rocks!!Thank you so much for sharing your gift. It made my day! I recall many happy times with my grandpere--not over books but he played solitaire and made fudge and told stories of his old lumberjack days and made the best homemade bread! Light on the path as you write on! eyestar Join in the WDC Party fun.! Try out "WDC 14th Birthday Sr. Mod. Challenge" ! ** Image ID #1815342 Unavailable ** "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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