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Loneliness Open in new Window. [E]
A despairing battle with loneliness
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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The title of this piece and the description are what got me here. And the opening lines are the reason I stayed; they're very strong and managed to get me hooked straightaway.

When you said it was a "battle" you weren't kidding.

I really like the way you portrayed this battle. I have to admit that I never pictured loneliness as a beast that attacks with claws, it always felt like a more passive snake-like foe who would sneak up from behind and attempt to suffocate his victim. But the way you described it here really fits it. Especially when it crawled inside:

"For the beast, now deep inside of me,
Continues its endless assault."

That is just a perfect description. And the whole poem has this feeling of being trapped. Although the narrator does fight and does attempt to escape from the beast, he/she still feels helpless in the face of this monster. And I feel like this is exactly the way it should be, because this might just be the only beast that a person can't escape alone. There has to be at least one more person for one to prevail.

This is very well written and quite thought provoking.

Many thanks for a great read!




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