Hi PureSciFi - and the Oscar goes!

Please keep in mind these are just my opinions and they carry only the weight you give them!

Overall Impression: It's always the Geeks!

Spelling/Grammar: I found just a few spelling/grammar errors for you to consider:

1. In this section - Hathis gave a new meaning to the words - you may want to delete the "a".

2. In this section - So he sent up a mini house down there - you may want to change "sent" to "set".

3. In this section - Hathis said down in a sheeted chair - you may want to change "said" to "sat".

4. In this section - Her sheets also sprang to life too - you don't need "also" and "too".

5. In this section - You already know I recently meet all of those females - you may want to change "meet" to "met".

6. In this section - finished his drink and up the empty container on a table - you may want to change "up" to "sat".

Readability: An interesting plot and entertaining read.

Suggestions: There is only one degree of death that I know of but there are many degrees of dying.

Write on!

Thanks much,
Lovina

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