Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating ! I'm reviewing Birthday Card With Gifts from Snow's Writing for 2019, 2020, & Beyond  today from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group"  for "I Write in 2019" !


Keep in mind that I'm merely basing my review off of my own personal interpretation of your work and don't feel obligated to use any suggestions that may lie within. I consider myself a forever student and sometimes simply enjoy exploring new poetic devices I have learned when I notice them.

Hopefully, you'll find this review helpful and encouraging!


Overall Impressions:

Creating a birthday-themed poem for a greeting card is no simple task. This was a wonderful challenge and you did a good job encompassing so much for the celebration of WDC 19th Birthday!

Conventions:

This Round of "The Random Poetry Contest"  challenged you to write a 19 line poem of any form desired. You chose to use rhyming quatrains with a monorhyme triplet to complete the requirements.

Your rhymes perfect and followed your chosen form covering the celebration, gifts, and their meanings throughout.

Suggestions:

There were just a couple of lines I think I saw errors on:

"Raise your voice exultation,"

I think should be:
"Raise your voice in exultation,"

"Today you turn nineteen year old,"

I think should be:
"Today you turn nineteen years old,"

I believe there are a couple of commas that do not need to be in some of the lines in the final stanza, but punctuation is so complicated in poetry I don't like to correct it.

Just to make the poem a little more visually uniform, the monorhyme triplet would feel more fitting as the final stanza, though the current lines, of course, would not work as far as story order.

Once again, poetic freedom, not really an issue just something that popped in my mind as I read it.


Additional Comments:

Good job, Neva! You are able to write so many different styles of poems and it's wonderful to see all the different styles and topics covered.

Keep On Writing!

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