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Review by Cadie Laine Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Introduction~
*NoteP*          Cadie here reveiwing for Building Emotion Lesson 3.

*AsteriskV*NOTE: This review is only the opinion of one author. This review is meant to help and NOT hurt.

Personal Impressions~
*NoteP*          The story continued well into the night.*Smile*

Plot, Conflict and Structure~
*NoteP*          Luke's mom has been calling Luke every night to get some paperwork done for her future. To put her mind at ease. Sarah with her past relationships has a fear of reliving her broken heart. Luke comes home and tenderly takes care of Sarah and eases her troubled mind.

Showing vs. Telling~
*NoteP*          This piece was told easily. I wonder if there could have been a few more "mind games" you could have added to the story. I enjoyed the descriptions you used as they were doing the deed. I was not expecting them to go all the way but the scene seemed to call for it.

Conclusions~
*NoteP*          You've done well with this story. I enjoyed reading it and can't wait for the next lesson you turn in.

*NoteP* Thank you for sharing and Keep Writing!


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