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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Namaste, Gupta Ji!

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I think you've captured the feelings of anyone who has faced a loss. The inability to cry when the shock first hits, the realisation of the void left and the yearning will resonate with many readers.

Suggestion:
While the poem works perfectly as it is, I have a suggestion anyway. I'd like to have seen one more verse - either offering comfort or talking of the time to come and how to cope. I think this would round it off.

Needless to say, I don't dare make any comment on the form - you're my guru where poetic forms and syllabic counts are concerned! *Smile*

Thanks for sharing this lovely poem!
Write On
- Sonali

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