Hello Steven Gepp!

I just finished reading these two chapters (seventeen and eighteen), so I'm here to do your review. I hope you find it encouraging and helpful.


INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:
These chapters were packed with action. Well done!

Your pacing was good (I believe this is what you most wanted to know?). Well done!



MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:

The aftermath of the first fight scene in this chapter was interesting. I hadn't expected that, though I should have, because you had already demonstrated that they were shifters.

I felt horrible for the father dragon.


I am interested to find out whether Sally gets medical attention or if Scott figures out how to treat her on the down low.

You left it off with a nice cliffhanger at the end of chapter eighteen. I'm sure readers will want to move on to the next chapter. Well done!


I didn't notice any spelling mistakes in your two chapters. Well done!




CONCLUSION:
You have a great writing style and I easily got drawn into the story. Well done!

Thank you for sharing your time and writing with the Writing.Com community!

May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance!
PWheeler








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