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Hi Rand Author Icon.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "Invalid Item" Open in new Window. found on the Read & Review feature.

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. I enjoy reading items that make me stretch. I mean, make me look up things that I don't understand. I wasn't sure if your title was an actual name, something from mythology. Having checked the Net, I discovered it's a form of butterfly.

This makes reading (and reviewing) your offering easier. Your descriptions fit well with your title. You rhyming pattern is well done too.

But, I think not many reviewers are like me, willing to seek out the meaning behind a name, or title. I wonder if you might add a note at the bottom of your poem explaining what Hesperiidae signifies.

Perhaps you hope your reader discerns the meaning from your words. For myself, I did not. Just a thought.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* I found no issues in this area.    

*Star* My Rating.  4.5. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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