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 Throwing Rocks Open in new Window. [E]
Little Johnny is throwing rocks and then the Earth explodes.
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Review of Throwing Rocks  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

Well, this is quite amusing. You’ve set up a rich juxtaposition of Little Johnny’s rather pathetic Appalachian home life and the sudden crashing of a meteorite into the field nearby, and his subsequent adoption of the poor little alien creature under the obliviousness of his drunken parents. The descriptive details bring it to life in a visceral, ironic way, without being too harsh or upsetting.

Your title and subtitle are catchy and draw the reader in; I only had to see it once to know I wanted to read it right now.

I see you’ve formatted it perfectly, with good font size and style, a word count right at the top, centered spacers and all that. I would suggest picking a third genre such as “Family,” at least once the contest is over. Also, it would be fun to know which contest and prompt you wrote it for; you can add that in a drop note at the bottom for posterity, because if you stick around here and enter a lot of contests, you'll want to be able to look back over your port and recall why you wrote any given story.

This was a pleasure to read; I kept going, having no idea what would happen next. It would be fun to have a sequel, as we wonder what sort of antics Little Johnny and Marty will get into in the future.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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