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"Dragons...There Be!" Open in new Window. [E]
Is there magic, In that Smoke on the water? Some say there be.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Greetings, Joey,

I liked this narrative, reading it as a carefully arranged prose poem. The thirty five lines ramble long across the page, sharing their story of a girl and her dragon in words that at first appeared not to rhyme, but on the second read through I spotted many rhymes. You’ve crafted it carefully, giving it a ballad feel with the steady repetition of the line “dragons there be” with appropriate variations as the story moves along. The theme of growing up and parting ways with the dragon, leaving it heartbroken and bereft, is one that’s been covered before (Puff, the Magic Dragon) but your creation is unique in the line length, vocabulary and size.

I approach poetry quite casually myself and so have no real suggestions for improvement in the way of word choices or meter. My favorite style is conversational, first person free verse… which often leads people to ask if I’m writing from personal experience *Laugh* it just comes out instinctively that way, I don’t know why.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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