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 Manic Open in new Window. [E]
about mania
by Sara Persaud Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Tulipp* Greetings, Sara Persaud ! And welcome to Writing.com! If you have any questions, please feel free to ask. *Smile*

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*Tulipo* What I Liked

         *Bulletv* This poem describes what mania feels like. For one of your genre options, you've chosen Experience. Who knows better than someone who's been through mania, right? I became absorbed in this piece, often connecting to what you so clearly describe. My favorite lines are:

a broken mirror in the sun
my micro seconds of genius
the fireworks of connecting dots

         *Bulletg* I like that you chose not to use any capital letters to begin your lines. I can't believe I'm going to say this, but even the tiny font seems to fit in with this. (I normally prefer the larger font--easier to read for me.)


*Tulipo* Suggestions/Comments to Consider

         I believe micro seconds is one word. *Right* microseconds
         I've no other suggestions. Great work!


*Tulipo* Final Thoughts

         Very nice. Good job. Once again, Welcome to WDC! Hope to see you around the site!


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