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Ladybug Beach Open in new Window. [E]
I was five when I made this poem so if you leave reviews I will maybe remake it. Enjoy!
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


*Reading* THE POEM

The poem was about ladybugs.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved the whimsical voice of the poem. It was very appealing and brought a smile to my face.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a poem with 5 quatrains and an AABB rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it read. Nice touch.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Ladybugs are super fun, they like to sit out in the sun," I pictured a late spring day, summer on the horizon, and it's warm, and vibrant green all around. There's a clear water stream nearby and the scent of fresh cut grass is in the air and ladybugs are fluttering by looking for a place to land and hang out. It's a great visual and puts the reader in a lighthearted mood.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening has a nice rhythmic beat and keeps the reader engaged. The title is a nice fit for the poem. I enjoyed the warmhearted look of the nature that surrounds us.

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