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High Hopes  [18+] It's good to have goals!  |
| (4.5)| An Angel Army Review Hi Legerdemain . I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "High Hopes" . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.  Overall Impression. It's been awhile since I visited your Port and I needed to review a Purple case to satisfy a reviewing requirement. So here I am.I had looked at a couple other items but decided I needed something a little lighter. As if reading about a hitman is lighter.  I watched the video that offered the prompt for your story. An interesting interpretation, I think. But that's what makes this site so interesting--the imagination that explodes from person to person and story to story. The fine print stated no minimum word count though it stated 500-word story was needed. You came close and that works for me. It hard to put a lot of depth into characters with so few words availabe, but you succeeded in my opinion. I found it interesting that a man of Hendon's experience would actually do a hit with a partner, especially one with limited experience. Perhaps he was training the younger man to take over. That thought obvious went wrong with your ending. The other thought I had was Hendon must have been paid upfront for the hit since he was leaving immediately. Yes, I realize the difficulty in writing such a story quickly and with so few words available. All in all not too bad.  Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. Good job with your dialogue. No punctuation issues that I found. My Rating. 4.5.  Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.Reviewed by JACE   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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