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The Jewel Thief Open in new Window. [13+]
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about the poet's brother who is a jewel thief.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I loved how the story unfolded in a very lighthearted way.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is free form poem. There are 5 lines to a stanza and all the lines in the stanza rythme. There is a bridge line between each stanza.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "I was offended by the suggestion that my baby brother was a jewel thief," It's the prompt for the poem. There's a lot of implication going on here. The poet is offended easy, the brother is a jewel thief. It tells a lot of story in just one line. There's a nice emotional undertone as well.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader with a nice easy rythme, and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Well done! Great storytelling.

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