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 | It's Classified  [E] Hand it Over  |
| (4.5)   HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM"Anniversary Reviews"   My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines. THE STORYGeorge wants his classified file, but the clerk isn't giving it up.  WHAT I LIKEDI loved the ending. It was solid and it made me chuckled.  POV NARRATION/TENSEThis is told in the 3rd person limited from George's perspective. Past tense is used in the story. DIALOGUEThere's a nice blend of dialogue and narration. Dialogue tags are used appropriately. OPENING PARAGRAPHThe opening paragraph put me right in the moment as George is asking for his classified folder. The opening paragraph offers a good hook. CHARACTERSGeorge is determined. A little determination goes a long way. FLOW & PACINGIt's spot on. I was right in the moment with George. MECHANICSI did not notice and spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase the font and make it easy on the eyes. PARTING THOUGHTSThe title fits the story well. The author uses a good economy of words to tell a solid story. The ending lands on a light-hearted comedic beat. A nice vinyette with a touch of A.I. An Angel Army Review
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