%%USERNAME%%    %%ACCWORDS%% %%ONOFF%% |
 Review #4766095 |
  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY!!! from "Anniversary Reviews"   Celebrating your writing this month with a review. Happy Account Anniversary merrijane, I discovered it’s your anniversary month at WDC and dropping off a review in acknowledgment of 21 years of this little writer’s hamlet. I noted that “Disembodied," addresses mom, when it explores themes of death, afterlife, and the nature of existence beyond the physical body. The introduction referencing Doctrine and Covenants 138:50 (learned to be a scripture from the Latter-day Saint tradition), hints at a spiritual take to help interpret the poem, since this scripture speaks about the continued existence of the soul after death. 1. Themes The central theme is transition from physical to spiritual existence and the emotional and sensory experiences associated with it. It questions afterlife and about potential longing for physical sensations and relationships left behind. There is suggestion of what peace and fulfillment in a spiritual state can claim. This was a contrast of the frailty of a physical body which posseses purity and potential activities of the spirit. 2. Poetic Devices Imagery You describe in rich detail with sensory images, vivid pictures of mom and her life with speculations about her afterlife. Descriptions such as "pain-wasted shell," "propped by walker and wheelchair," and "smell of pies baking" that gave a strong sense physical reality and a mundane life, yet still, cherished aspects of life. Your imagery grounds in me the reader about the knowable and experienced world before moving into the ethereal. Questions Such a great tool, sometimes rhetorical or for dramatic effect are questions. This poem used a series of rhetorical questions to convey uncertainty and curiosity about the afterlife. These questions can engage a reader to stop and consider a weighty topic, inviting one to ponder with the poet existentialist notions and the potential joy within a nature of existence beyond death. Your questions emphasize the emotional connection and longing the poet feels for mother. Contrast I find a stark contrast between a frail, pain-ridden body and the potential activities of that spirit. The juxtaposition of "sewing the day you slipped away" with "accompany angel choirs" highlights this transformation from earthly struggles to possible heavenly peace and purpose. Tone The liked the tone, contemplative and tender, filled with love and a sense of loss for mom, yet also with hope. The direct address to the mom added an intimate, personal touch, making these reflections feel all the more immediate and heartfelt. It’s how I would intone, want the loved one past suffering to be free as spirit. As was the case after I eulogized my mom. Happened in dreams after mom’s passing, for roughly two weeks, dreams filled with conveyances of a vibrant woman. I knew young, and alive and not like the unemotive, nursing home resident, to show she found freedom with her new spirit. Interwoven Elements I looked to see how all this layered, intertwined to serve theme/subject. From imagery, questions, contrast, and tone, a layered composition of expressed exploration of grief, hope, and the afterlife emerged. The vivid depictions of the physical limitations created a poignant reminder of what has been lost, while questions and speculative scenes of afterlife consider continuity and transformation to bring loved ones and readers comfort. All together, this is a hopeful piece, to have active existence again, solace for the living. The intimacy gave the musings personal and genuine feeling, deep connecting a reader to a relatable, knowable experience. It was a comforting reflection on potential of new life beyond the physical. I appreciate having found your poem this weekend, Brian WDC Anniversary and Angel Army Reviewer   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
|
|||
View Portfolio
Visit Notebook
Send Gift Points
Awards
Badges
Send Email
Community Newsfeed
General Discussion
Sponsored Items
Book of Trinkets
Static Items
Books
Groups
Interactive Stories
Audio
Campfire Creatives
Community Notes
Crossword Puzzles
Documents
Folders
Images
In & Outs
Madlibs
Photo Albums
Polls
Product Reviews
Quizzes
Survey Forms
Web Pages
Word Searches
You responded to this review 07/29/2024 @ 11:20pm EDT