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| (5.0)   Greetings, Sumojo! I am reviewing this because I am part of "I Write in 2024" and you happened to post your entry previous to mine.  First of all, my reviews are intended to be helpful and encouraging, not hurtful in any way. Use what you feel works for you, and leave the rest. The Positives/What I Liked This is soooo good, Sue! I did not know that Australia was not your country of birth. This reminds me of when I was a very young adult and wanted to go to Australia. It seems like there was an incentive to move there and I was in the mood for an adventure! It never happened, however.  You've done a fantastic job with this shifting poem, though my heart hurts for you.   Your rhyming and meter are amazing. It's hard to pick a favorite line, as I would like to pick the entire eight lines! So...okay, I'll just pick the first four (though I love them all!):Realigning, shifting, sliding. That’s how it felt to leave. Changing, readjusting, missing Family, crying. We were so naïve.  Excellent job! Suggestions/Comments to ConsiderI would change nothing! Final ThoughtsThank you for sharing this wonderful, emotion piece, written from the heart.  A Review from: "Invalid Item" Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby ")
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You responded to this review 08/27/2024 @ 7:03am EDT