Review of Lilly’s Christmas by Charles prier

Hello, Charles. I am robrayl and it's my pleasure to have read your story{/font}.

My review of your story is as follows:

Relatable or not:

Lilly's voice is genuine and understated, making her a deeply sympathetic character. Despite her hardships, she finds warmth in small moments, and the anticipation of Christmas adds a sense of hope to the story.

setting and Atmosphere:

Decorating the Christmas tree, baking cookies, and listening to carolers create a nostalgic, cozy holiday atmosphere that immerses the reader in the festive spirit. Although I've never experienced Christmas, I can understand the festive atmosphere created by decorating the tree, baking cookies, and listening to carolers.

Conflict:

The Foster family's kindness contrasts with Miss Agnes's cold demeanor, adding depth to the story. Lilly, treated better than before but still seen as a "servant," faces struggle. This conflict makes her joy at an unexpected Christmas gift even more touching.

Characters :

While Lilly is well-developed, Missis and Mister Foster could use more depth. They're kind but distant and adding details about their feelings toward Lilly could strengthen the emotional connection.

Dialogue:

The dialogue moves the story forward but sometimes feels stiff. For example, Luke's question about Santa and the chimney could be more childlike. Varying speech patterns would help differentiate characters' voices.

Final thoughts

This heartwarming holiday story balances hardship with hope. The final scene of joy feels well-earned. Adding more character depth and natural dialogue would elevate it further, but Lilly’s Christmas is already a memorable and touching read.


So, that’s it! Keep writing—you’re on a good pace.

Warm regards,
Robrayl












My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .