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 Arrowing is Harrowing Open in new Window. [ASR]
And the Bow leaves you Low
by THANKFUL SONALI 18 WDC Years! Author Icon
Review by Choconut Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi THANKFUL SONALI 18 WDC Years! Author Icon,

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What I liked:

*Bulletv* I found this a really interesting poem. I have to confess, arranged marriages aren't really something I've thought much about before, but this poem intrigued me. It states the case for finding a partner with your head, not your heart. And, honestly, that probably is a more stable basis from which to start. Our hearts, and those arrows the little fellow fires, tend to make rash decisions. Not always, but it happens.

*Bulletv* The rhythm is really good for the first two verses, with the aabb rhyme scheme. It is a great way to start the poem as it is easy to read and enjoyable. The third verse, with the differing rhyme schemes, is a little less smooth. It threw me a little because I'd picked up a good, even pace with the first two verses. In the final verse, you revert to the aabb ccdd, etc. rhyme scheme, and I was back in the zone again.

*Bulletv* Although I mentioned the third verse not being as smooth, I love the content of it. The way you reference Tina Turner, and throw in her song, 'What's Love Got To Do With It'? That is really clever. I think my favourite line, though, is: "To find the groom - farmer, tailor or baker!" That made me chuckle.

Suggestions:

Only that I would change the third verse and make it fit with the rest of the poem. Unless it is a specific form that requires that. Although, I don't think it is because you haven't stated that. But it does throw off the rhythm and pace of the poem. Also, this line in the second verse seems a little uneven: "Let's get the community matchmaker."

Parting comments:

This is a really good poem. It is enjoyable, made me smile, but also made me think about a subject I hadn't really considered before. Nice work.


Choconut

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