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 A shopping I must go Open in new Window. [E]
A shopping funny
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

*Reading* THE POEM

A poem about shopping for the holidays.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

I enjoyed the story the poem told. It made me chuckle.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a poem with 5 line stanzas. The 2nd and 4th lines rythme in each stanza.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read and has a nice flow when read out loud.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "What he don't know and I don't tell, won't hurt him anyway." I love this description of the narrator's justification for her admission. It's told in a playful rythming way, as maybe a careless afterthought, but it really speaks to the heart of the narrator's feelings. And sometimes, what somebody doesn't know doesn't hurt them.


*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader with a nice sing-song rythme and keeps them reading. The title fits the poem well. Nice comedic beats.

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