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Afoul Open in new Window. [E]
We often see beauty, but miss what lies beneath...
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, Jeffrey!

I’ve had this lingering in my review drafts for ages now…

Your poetic touch here is brilliant. You’ve captured the vibe of Steinbeck or Remington while making something universal and mythical. The atmosphere is haunting… one thing of beauty takes over the land, subjugating all to the point of no return, yet who can say it’s not good? Then, the twist, the implications of the narrator’s own selling out, and the final drought of unfulfilled desire and withered hopes leaves one questioning, seeking the deeper meaning behind the fable.

You have indented thoughtfully, with the stepped progression building suspense to the single return line to create an engaging look. I always recommend Size 4 Verdana for the best reading experience for all ages, abilities and devices. Have you dropped this off at "Shadows and Light Poetry Contest" Open in new Window. or "First and Second Chance Poetry Contest" Open in new Window.? It really deserves a ribbon.

I’m pleased to meet you and hope to have a moment to browse your portfolio soon.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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