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 Prahlada Open in new Window. [E]
The story of a rebel prince.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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*PenB* First Impressions:

This reads like the retelling of a classic myth. It wasn’t one I was familiar with so I can’t say how close you stayed to the original tale, but I found it fascinating to learn about this. I was glad that you explained a couple of the terms at the bottom - I would have had to resort to Google otherwise but this was helpful.

The story itself was very interesting. It opened with a cosmic premise, but the real story was about a child’s unwavering devotion. For me, the turning point in the story came when Prahlada responded to his father's threats not with fear or rebellion, but with simple, profound faith. “My spirit yearns for Vishnu” is such a gentle line, but it carries enormous weight in the context of the violence and darkness surrounding him.


*PenG* Suggestions:

The story was well written but I noticed a few small errors:

He vowed to wreak vengeance on those, who were responsible for his family’s desertion of the palace and a royal life.
I believe you don’t need the comma after ‘those’.

Leela, his concert replied timidly
I think that was meant to say ‘consort’, meaning the spouse of a reigning monarch. Also, I think there should be a comma after ‘consort’.

He was thrown into raging fire.
There seems to be a word missing, ‘into a raging fire’.


*PenP* Final Thoughts:

Overall, I thought this was a powerful and dignified story. The message, that anything is possible with devotion and faith, was very clear. A lovely, mythic tale well told.




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