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 | November Lighthouse  [E] The end is near. (Winner, Writer's Cramp Contest, 2021 Nov 4)  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Hello, Ronski! INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:  I enjoyed reading your "November Lighthouse" poem today. Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:  Happy Writing.Com Anniversary day and month! I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging. It is meant to be honest and respectful, in accordance with WDC guidelines. I found your poem in the "Anniversary Reviews" forum today, reviewed by someone else that I respect. I love lighthouses so decided to give it a read, and enjoyed it so decided to give you a review. While I tend to me more of a person who likes lighter poems, I still enjoyed this darker poem of yours. I could imagine the person struggling to light the flame of an old fashioned lighthouse. I could imagine their heartbreak at the end. So you drew out much emotion in me by the end of that poem, and created some strong images along the way. I thought the rhyming lent a musical quality to your poem, which by the end felt a bit haunting, but was perfect for the message of your "November Lighthouse" poem. My favorite line was the "No ships were lost, but it was close." line. I felt a bit of relief there. I thought you did a great job with the prompt for that day of the Writer's Cramp and cheered for you when I saw that you won it for that day with this "November Lighthouse" poem of yours. Congratulations! I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your "November Lighthouse" poem. I thought the drama and emotional genres you selected for this "November Lighthouse" poem were appropriate matches for it.IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have some little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section. Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!   The "other" genre isn't likely to net you more future readers, as I don't think anyone searches for that. I'd recommend choosing a different genre for that one, as people do search by genre here. Perhaps "cultural," "dark," "regional," or "experience” might be nice options to consider? There's a drop down list, as you know, because you had to use it to select “other". I don't have it memorized; those are just some suggestions. The actual list will probably be more helpful. Just to show it's not only me who recommends this, moderator Schnujo's Giving Away GPs  shared on the news feed in a comment on 2/21/2025 that “SM has told me, himself, that the #1 way people search for things to read on WdC is through the genre search, so if you aren't filling out all 3 genres, you are literally missing out on readers.” [On the very slim chance that you don't already know this, SM is our StoryMaster here, and definitely in the know.] If you want to see the note and scroll down to see her whole comment, here’s the link: "Note: View this Note". It's always nice for me as a reader to have the poetry form and line count listed below the poem, perhaps in a "notes" section. I don't know how long it took me to start doing that, but once I did, readers responded favorably. So I'd recommend adding that information beneath your poem. It might help you get more future readers if you added a thumbnail picture to your story, if your membership level allows that. Pictures are attention getting and could help your story stand out in a list of search results. I think a picture of a lighthouse on a dark winter night would be especially nice. If you haven't already done so, I encourage you to enter this poem in the Traditional Poetry Contest run by Bren, aka username brenpoet. It only accepts form poetry and I suspect that your line count is within the allowed limits. As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't. CONCLUSION:  I enjoyed reading your "November Lighthouse" poem, and appreciated all the imagery and feelings it generated in me as I read it. Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, and writing with the Writing.Com community! Once again, happy anniversary day and month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance, during your anniversary month, and always! PWheeler   A SuperPower Reviewers Choice review!  The B.E.A.R. Fund  ROAR   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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