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 | Pita goes ballistic  [18+] About my cat Pita, my namesake.  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Hello, Pita! INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:  I enjoyed reading your "Pita goes ballistic" poem every time I read it, including today. Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end each time I read it.MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:  Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I read this "Pita goes ballistic" poem of yours sometime in the past and enjoyed it, but didn't have time to review it right then, so I flagged it for an anniversary review (meaning I saved the link to it in a special "April" file.  ). I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging. It is meant to be honest and respectful, in accordance with WDC guidelines. I originally found your poem in the "Anniversary Reviews" forum, reviewed by someone else that I respect. I love cats, so your description is what caused me to read your poem. Your Pita sounds like a lot of personality in a tiny package. I don't think I've ever heard of an adult cat that only weighed in at two pounds before. The smallest adult cat I've shared my life with weighed seven pounds. People always thought she was a kitten. I wished that your picture still showed up because I don't remember what she looked like and I'd love to see it again. I hope you'll reinstate the picture someday. If you do, feel free to let me know (and share the link again) so I can look. I thought the free verse style worked well with the message of your poem. My favorite stanza was the first because I think it was the most relatable to me personally, with my experience of cats. I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your "Pita goes ballistic" poem. I thought the animal, melodrama, and women's genres you selected for this poem were appropriate matches for it. I appreciated your notes section beneath your poem, which shared more information about your beloved Pita. As this poem was written so long ago, it'd be a miracle if she were still alive. I hope she is though.IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have one little suggestion to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section. Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!  It's always nice for me as a reader to have the poetry form and line count listed below the poem, perhaps in a "notes" section. I don't know how long it took me to start doing that, but once I did, readers responded favorably. So I'd recommend adding that information beneath your poem. It might help you get more future readers if you added a thumbnail picture to your story, if your membership level allows that. Pictures are attention getting and could help your story stand out in a list of search results. I think if you still have the picture that was originally added (that isn't showing up for me today), that would make an excellent thumbnail, but any picture of Pita would be fantastic. Barring that, any cat picture would work just fine. If you haven't already done so, I encourage you to enter this poem in the Shadows and Light Poetry Contest run by Rachel, aka choconut, username purplesunday. It only takes free verse poetry and I think your line count is within the limits (though be sure to double check). As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't. CONCLUSION:  I enjoyed reading your "Pita goes ballistic" poem, and empathized with your sentiments that you expressed in it. Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community! Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance, during your anniversary month, and always! PWheeler   A SuperPower Reviewers Choice review!  The B.E.A.R. Fund   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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