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 The Keeper of the Cemetery  Open in new Window. [13+]
A gothic, surrealistic, and humorous story on a Jewish theme.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings and welcome to writing.com!

You've set up a delightful and amusing take here, woven with old-fashioned narrative style and translated with your own heart and mind. It's funny, but I've noticed myself that some Canadians don't seem to have a good grip on English grammar... Then again, many Americans don't either *Pthb*

As a previously published story and an experienced author, I don't think you need a whole lot of "advice" about "improvement." Your writing style is well developed, and you translated the work from the original Russian without error, giving us something fun to read with a flavoring of cultural subtext and harmless teasing of those strange pale people...

Perhaps a word count in the subtitle or the opening would be helpful, as many of us here prefer stories as brief as possible, or at least like to know how much time to allow for reading. Along those lines, your storytelling pace seems a bit plodding, but I won't criticize that.

You may also want to increase font size from the default (I can't tell exactly what modifications you've used because I'm on mobile... You may also have simply uploaded a word doc, which I forget is even a possibility around here...) My personal preference is Size 4 Verdana. You can access the text modification settings in the row of tiles above the entry box. A question mark is available to click on for a helpful manual.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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