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 | White Tale  [E] What are her thoughts?  |
| (5.0)  HAPPY WDC ACCOUNT ANNIVERSARY FROM "Anniversary Reviews"  Hello, Gene, aka geneb! INITIAL IMPRESSION / OVERVIEW:  I enjoyed reading your "White Tale" short story this evening. Your writing kept me riveted and I read straight through to the end.MORE DETAILED FEEDBACK:  Happy Writing.Com Anniversary month! I hope you enjoy this review as a celebration of your time here and find the review uplifting and encouraging. It is meant to be honest and respectful, in accordance with WDC guidelines. I found your short story in the "Anniversary Reviews" forum today, reviewed by someone else that I respect. Your title drew me in and your description piqued my interest, so I clicked and read your "White Tale" short story and enjoyed it greatly, so I decided to give you a review as a little anniversary gift. Happiest anniversary wishes to you and best wishes on your writing future too! I suspected early on what the twist at the end would be, and I was right, but I wasn't disappointed because I am a lover of what the twist was (trying to write this without spoiling the surprise for someone who hasn't read it yet). I wondered if this was a true story, or a "creative nonfiction" kind of piece, or if it was totally fiction. It felt like it had an element of truth to it. My favorite parts were the reveal at the end, and how your admiration for the white beauty shined throughout your story. I wondered if this piece was written for a particular contest or challenge here? I didn't notice any spelling or grammatical mistakes (or mistakes of any kind) in your "White Tale" short story. I thought the emotional, environment, and inspirational genres you selected for this "White Tale" short story of yours were relevant matches for it. Wouldn't it be great if we could know the thoughts of your White Beauty?IDEAS TO MAKE YOUR PIECE STRONGER: In the spirit of helpfulness, and because of the requirements of a new reviewing challenge I joined recently, I have some little suggestions to make your piece stronger. If you're interested in some constructive criticism, read on. But if you aren't, no worries. Just know that I enjoyed your piece and move on to the next section. Still reading? You're brave! Yay for you!  It's always nice for me as a reader to have the word count listed below the story (or even above it), perhaps in a "notes" section. I don't know how long it took me to start doing that, but once I did, readers responded favorably. So I'd recommend adding that information beneath your story (or above it). It might help you get more future readers if you added a thumbnail picture to your story, if your membership level allows that. Pictures are attention getting and could help your story stand out in a list of search results. As with any review, please take what serves you and release or ignore what doesn't. CONCLUSION:  I enjoyed reading your "White Tale" short story, and empathized with your sentiments that you expressed in it. Thank you for sharing your time, creativity, heart, experiences, and writing with the Writing.Com community! Once again, happy anniversary month! I hope the year ahead is filled with blessings and joy for you!May love, joy and peace be yours in abundance, and may the Lord bless you and all that you do, during your anniversary month, and always! PWheeler   A SuperPower Reviewers Choice review!  The B.E.A.R. Fund   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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