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 Review #4817625 |
 | The Lighthouse  [E] Flashfiction, 121 words, precicely; no more, no less!  |
| (3.5)| A WdC SuperPowers Review Hi Raskolnick . I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "The Lighthouse" . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.  Overall Impression. Good morning. Your offering came up on rotation in the site's Read & Review feature.Obviously, I'm very glad you provided a translation of your story. I'm not sure of the original language, but I'm sure you'll have fewer readers should you continue posting as such. After all, WDC is an English-based platform. That said, your two paragraphs were a great teaser. Your story came across as an opening for more to come. You named your story "Lighthouse" indicating that edifice bore some significance to the story. However, your story didn't really speak to that importance. Were you limited to the number of words you used? I was interested in reading more, but was left wanting. You have a good basis for a great story. A couple of housekeeping items: Rating your Intro Non-E wasn't necessary and limits the places your item may be displayed on WDC. Also, use the Brief Description to entice your reader. It should be used as a billboard teasing the reader to read your story. Flashfiction, 121 words, precicely; no more, no less! offers nothing to your reader.  Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. I think the translation is obvious and doesn't need to be explained. Just leave this part out--(Translation in English: My Rating. 3.5. A good start, but leaves me wondering, 'Is there more?' Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.Reviewed by JACE   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You last responded to this review 06/02/2025 @ 12:31pm EDT