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 | LOVE IS NOT JUST A FEELING...  [13+] This is how one may view what love is while the author gives her own view of that love is  |
| (4.5)| A WdC SuperPowers Review Hi Ri_leigh . I'm JACE , and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "LOVE IS NOT JUST A FEELING..." . I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.  Overall Impression. First and foremost, welcome to Writing.Com. I hope you find both the site and the members helpful to you on your writing journey.Your offering came up on the site's Read & Review feature. That feature offers up random items for members to review because the author is or has been online today. You add a great deal of depth and thought to your feelings of love. So many people run into something they believe is love without contemplating the depth of what they wish to embrace. That's something you try and explain. You have some very insightful thoughts on the subject. The one trouble I have about reviewing poetry is often a lack of a specific form. In particular, the actual use of punctuation is either non-existent or used sparingly. I think some of your sentence could benefit with commas to give your reader pause, to allow them to read and process your statements properly. For example, you wrote: Sure, love is patient, love is kind it does not envy it does not boast. You use a single comma perfectly. But I, as your reader, rush the remainder of the sentence because there is nothing to give me pause. Of course, I'm familiar with the quote so I know how to read it. But someone else may not. It should be: Sure, love is patient, love is kind, it does not envy, it does not boast. I really like the way you tie your stanzas together with the final phrase of each one-- love is what you do to prove it.  Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc. By the same token, while I mentioned the use of commas above, using a ? at the end of a question is necessary--specifically, in your second stanza. My Rating. 4.5.  Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.Reviewed by JACE   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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You responded to this review 05/30/2025 @ 6:20pm EDT