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 Review #4818915 |
Destroyed  [13+] Tragedy strikes, tearing a family apart. What can bring healing?  |
| Hello Amethyst Angel 💐  . Thank you for entering this month's contest.
As the official Judge of this contest, I have the following comments to offer for "Destroyed"  Did you answer the question?Yes, you did this with a story that described a great pain, a great injustice, and then the power of forgiveness as a source of healing. Use of quotes, proof-texting or AI - could I hear your voice?I included two major tests to sift out the cheaters from the genuine in this contest. First was the red herring of poverty in the question list which you skillfully avoided. No major religion regards poverty as the major problem of the human condition, and anyone who equates that on the same level as the other problems mentioned was probably using a morally relativistic AI to inform their answers or had never given the matter much serious thought. The second test was one of hierarchy, in which order did you prioritize the problems and the solutions? So obviously something like poverty or pain which are discomforting features of this life only do not compare with things that might end with eternal damnation. So the sins of the father and the drunk driver were regarded as the main problems highlighted here but so also a journey of discovery that allowed the victim's father to see the perpetrator with more sober eyes and find the strength to forgive. Your story prioritized forgiveness as the root of all healing here and the solution. This is indeed the Christian option. How consistent was your argument?Pains like the loss of a child impact the whole of a person's life and can manifest in the complexity of every aspect of those lives. But you navigated this story very well from trauma to healing. Reema's blaming, the anger at the sentencing, and the pain felt onto the final confrontation and then its resolution. My thoughts on the substance of what you saidYour story reminded me of a well-known Christian book, "The Hut". A man spends time with God in that story wrestling with the loss of a child which broke his faith for a season. Also perhaps we all know people who have lost children and the enormous pain of such losses is clear. I liked how you managed to include all the important elements of the question (bar the red herring of poverty) and managed to sift and sort these into the correct hierarchy of understanding. Your story and the resolution were also a moving account and valuation of the power of forgiveness. Let mercy triumph over judgment as the Bible says. This review is much shorter than with the other contestants because for the most part, I just enjoyed the content and agreed with you. Mechanical issuesNothing major to say here. Thanks again for entering. LightinMind  
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You responded to this review 06/04/2025 @ 12:01pm EDT