Greetings No Sox with Sandals .

I am reviewing your story today in connection with "I Write in 2025"  [13+] as part of the challenge since I did post after you in the forum. Thank you for sharing your writing and entering contests on the site.


Initial Reaction: An interesting story where I didn't quite get the prompt at first but once I saw the details at the bottom it all did make sense. For some reason, I skimmed the title but once I knew more, going back to read things over was even better. I really appreciated the character that was presented and how they went through struggles from something that others would find so mundane that it would seem strange to stress or panic. I found the main character very relatable and didn't even mind the first person POV that usually isn't my favorite. Nice work here.


Contest/Prompt: Now, here is where I am a little uncertain because I do know some about the contest. I haven't really entered it but I've kept an eye on it since like to promote contests in newsletters. While the story does well in the characterization, I'm not 100 percent sure on the shown compared to told aspect. So, I'm hoping it works well with the contest. Also, thank you for sharing the information at the bottom of the item. I could tell which of the prompts you uses but also kind of appreciated that you shared the options instead of just the one you picked. It's not commonly done to share more than just the prompt used and I liked seeing that added.

Good luck with the contest.


Final Notes and Other Thoughts: Overall, you did a good job with this very short story. The contest allows more but sometimes you don't need to go to the top of the allowed range. You did quite a bit in under 1,000 words that other readers will appreciate.

One thing that I would recommend is to put the font one size bigger. I can read the story at the current size but do know there are some on the site that struggle with the standard size the site uses for any item. I've started using 3.5 for most of my writing when I remember but do sometimes forget too and have to fix things later. It helps for those with screen issues, aging that affects how they read on a computer and anyone who might check out your item on a cell phone. Just a general suggestion but nothing major and it shouldn't affect the contest results I would imagine.

Nice work with the story. Great job with the characterization and believability in showcasing that kind of scenario. Keep writing!





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .