Hi, Howl ,

I found this poem in your portfolio and decided to review it.

A self-reflective poem about the poet's struggle to help others when he himself has issues to overcome. Is it correct or valid to do so and forget his own misery?

My answer would be, it's always good to try to help others, but never forget yourself, who you are, and your own needs.

In my opinion, it's almost impossible to solve all your own issues, so that would mean you cannot be there for others. No, it can go both ways. You don't have to be better, more sane, or equipped to help; it might even be to your advantage to help others while requiring help yourself. It can give others confidence that they are not alone in this, that hey...the helper suffers the same. Makes you more human. You don't have to be perfect to help others, but you have to be honest.

I love this poem because it's an honest cry of attention to self. And pay attention to your own burden. However, continue to be there for others if possible.

The structure of the poem is another matter. At first glance, it was a prose poem, which I love. Later, I discovered you try to make it rhyme as well, and sometimes it doesn't rhyme. That made the poem a bit wobbly, as you are balancing two thoughts. Rhyme or not.

Because the message and the rhythm are so powerful, I would opt for turning this into a prose poem without the (forced) rhyme. It doesn't need rhyme.

This made me give you an awardicon because of the content and overall view of the poem, but a 4-star because it can be made better. But this is just one opinion, do with it what you like.

Thanks for sharing, keep on writing.

WakeUpAndLive

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .