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A Quiet Revolution Open in new Window. [13+]
Russell starts his own personal revolution
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, Sue.

I'm here for I Write 2025 *Smile*

You paint here a bleary picture indeed... I can almost feel the coal dust staining everything, and the sense of despair is palpable.

The one spark of hope we see is when Russell stops to help a fellow man and regains some of his humanity by reconnecting with those who are also struggling. He resolves, not to attempt to overthrow the unjust government, but simply to stand by his neighbors and be a man worthy of respect.

You present an angle of English history I had not specifically heard of before. Like you, I lean economically left and am aware that Margaret Thatcher was a rather awful prime minister. This is a quick glimpse of the havoc wreaked on society's poorest by the callousness of those in power.

I would note, this is likely not rated E by WdC standards because of the word "sh*t" at one point. Also, you have several extra quotation marks scattered throughout at the beginning and end of paragraphs. Other simple typos such as "it's" for "its" and "principal" instead of "principle" could stand to be tidied up.

I learned a new word: "flannelette," a soft fabric made not from the wool of flannel but of cheaper, coarser cotton.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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