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 | Close  [E] This is a poem about being close  |
| (4.0)| Hello, bookloverqueen .A review from a "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" member! I enjoyed reading your poem! It was written well to show the emotion in only six lines. It told a sad story and each line built-up to show just how emotional it was for the main character. I think to smooth it out a tad, it would be good to use punctuation to help push the emotion even further. You use an exclamation point at the end, but I think it would benefit with a few more stops along the way. Also, with the last line, I believe it should be 'there' not 'their'. I thought your title fit the poem perfectly.   One tip. Filling out the three genres will help to bring in more readers -- especially when they do a search on a specific genre.  Welcome to Writing.Com, and enjoy the site. I hope you post more of your work in the future.  Keep up the great work! Lornda   My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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