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 WLTM IRL Open in new Window. [18+]
A vampire uses online dating to find his victims.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
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Greetings, Jeff *Smile*

I discovered this fun piece via the Random Read and Review button.

Being a softie, I kinda skimmed lightly through it, looking for the "punchline" which I suspected was in there somewhere towards the end. Knowing your style, I found the ending to be satisfying and amusing. (There wouldn't have been much point to the story otherwise, imho... *Think*)

I would recommend using a larger font size, and perhaps adding a cover art to give it a little pizzazz, but aside from that I can't think of anything to improve this straightforward yarn. I can almost see Anton's obnoxious smirk as he fishes for prey. I'm a little confused by the combination of both "urban camo" and "vampire hunting regalia," but that's my own cultural aversion to the subject *Laugh*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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