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Given: Jul 25, 2025 at 1:21pm
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Greetings, bookloverqueen! I am reviewing this because I discovered it on the "Read and Review" page. By the way, Welcome to Writing.com! I noticed you have recently joined this wonderful community! If you have any questions, don't hesitate to ask any of us here.
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The Positives/What I Liked Aw...such a heartbreaking little poem. Loss is so hard. I felt you expressed this well without overdoing it. Sometimes less is more. Your words are simple, but at the same time, filled with loss and regret.
Suggestions/Comments to Consider
---> In your last line, their should be there.
---> Also, consider omitting the exclamation point at the very end. But that is up to you, of course. It's not really incorrect, but in my humble opinion, it took away from the tone.
Final Thoughts
Thank you for sharing this beautiful poem of heartbreak with us on Writing.com. Nice work. Again, welcome to the site!
Have a great day and... K e e p on W r i t i n g ! Cubby
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