Hello there Random Ghost

I noticed that you are new to the site and thought I'd stop by to offer a review. I have been around for quite some time, so if you have any questions or need some places to ask things, email me. Or there are some forums if you want to put them out to get different opinions from others.

Initial Reaction: It sounds like you have the makings of a blog or personal journal here, with "nothing to do" and I'm assuming that it's what is going on in your daily life. This doesn't really read as something you would make up, which helps for some of the decisions made that I will go into detail a little lower in this review.

Hopefully, in the future, if you stay around long enough and get a higher level membership, you could have a book item and create a blog here for these entries.

Title and Description: I like the title because it's fitting. When it comes to fiction we worry about writing the days where something does happen. In a blog post. However, as a moderator I do have to mention that you shouldn't use the coding of doing things like the "1" instead of an "I" to avoid actually swearing. Here it is either use the word or don't use it. I would just change it to crap because while very mild, it does put the description to non-e due to the site's restrictions. Some don't agree with that quality while others want us to be even more strict, so we try to balance in fairness. Nothing wrong with a non-e entry either.


General Thoughts and Reactions: Aww. I might be old but I could feel the crest of emotion over the PS2 with the happiness to the pain right away. For stories and poems, I tend not to want the yelling all caps for words but with the personal blog entries, I say go for it. They add punch while showing where you experience some emotional bursts. Maybe have it all caps for "doesn't spare anyone" cause it looks weird with the e that didn't get to be big. And while on that, I think you mean "spar" instead of spare.

You have some typos that you could fix in the future if you decide to do an edit on your blog entries, or you can keep them and as you develop your skills the later entries will show what you learn.

I like the additional information of what song you were listening to during the writing process for this entry.

Thank you for posting on the site. I hope that you continue to post and find your way around the site. Good luck.





My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .