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 The Plunge Open in new Window. [13+]
Flash Fiction
by LoneWolf Author Icon
Review of The Plunge  Open in new Window.
Review by Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
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Hi LoneWolf

I discovered your item on Writing.com via random Read & Review and am sending the following feedback for your consideration.


Positives

I thought you did a good job working all of the prompts into the story. That's not easy to do in a piece this short!


Suggestions

It's unclear what the implication is of why Dafny's bikini turned brown after last year's plunge. Is the river that dirty? Is there another reason? I think some clarification is needed.


Overall

Overall, I enjoyed the read. Nice work!


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Jeff Author IconMail Icon
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