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 The Attic Window Open in new Window. [E]
Unexpected meeting turns solitude into a moment of warmth, filling it with newfound beauty
by Tani Ilves Author Icon
Review of The Attic Window  Open in new Window.
Review by JACE Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Tani Ilves Author Icon.

I'm JACE Author Icon, and I have the honor of reading and reviewing your offering "The Attic Window" Open in new Window., which I found on through the Hub's Newest Static Items listing.

I invite your attention to the comments below. Please bear in mind these notes are from one on the outside looking in; ultimately only you can decide what's right for your story.

*Note1* Overall Impression. This is a perfect look into one person's time of solitude. Sometimes we just need to decompress, to sit quietly and reflect on the day to come or the end of the day.

Your character has found that place where the day's cares and worries may be measured and filed away. The introduction of an additional character adds a new facet. And anyone who has held a purring kitten or cat knows the calming effect that results.

Your descriptions of the attic cubby really help set the scene for one's considered reflection.

I was a little at odds when reading about an attic within a cabin. I've always considered a cabin to be a smaller building normally on one level with very few rooms and space. An attic seems an over-reach in a cabin.

*Exclaim* Technical and Editorial Considerations. In this section I normally list those areas that relate specifically to the mechanics of your writing--punctuation, grammar, spelling, etc.

         *Bullet* May I offer one suggestion? I think the following sentence runs on and might easily be split into two, which would not jar me as a reader.  Right now, only the cloudless blue sky is visible through it, but in time, when the night settles outside, it will be scattered with a myriad of stars.  Right now, only the cloudless blue sky is visible through it. In time, as the night settles outside, it will be scattered with a myriad of stars.

*Star* My Rating.  4.5. 

*Heart* Thank you for sharing this offering. Please accept these comments as offered in friendship and support. They are but my humble opinion.


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