EXCELLENT! Most encouraging, Amethyst Angel!

It's so sad that ID didn't realize about John 17:9, KJV, “I pray for them: I pray not for the world, but for them which thou hast given me; for they are thine.” Jehovah's Witnesses do not believe that Jesus is Jehovah. I've gotten funny reactions when I've said that I do believe this, but I'm convinced this verse proves that He is the God Who prays.

I don't know your background, but I hope I'm treading lightly enough on this subject. I simply danced around this piece of trivia to say, "I believe the Bible shows that Jesus is the God Who prays."

As for the technical aspects of the poem, I see some rhymes. The rhythms seem to mimic the song as you've indicated. Nicely done.

I had to listen to the song as I was unfamiliar with it. Makes me sad to see the cynicism and hopelessness.

I'm sure we both much prefer John 6:37, KJV, "All that the Father giveth me shall come to me; and him that cometh to me I will in no wise cast out."

This is a wonderful reimagining of the Imagine Dragon's song. WRITE ON!