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| (4.5)| Hello sa_xe  I found your item on The Plug Page. I like your writing style in this piece, it is very poetic. I can picture the scene of the person waking up and going through their morning routine. I like the short, sharp sentences, i think it gives it a cinematic quality. The commute is something many of us can relate to - a lot of us do this, or have done at some point in our lives. I have done everything from an hour + commute on a bus and ferry, to no commute working from home! (The latter naturally preferred  )My favourite lines? Then slowly, one by one, people came from the mist to wait on the platform and make little clouds of their own. Life is like a big blank page of meaninglessness, punctuated by small moments of meaning. SO TRUE Suggestions - In terms of the layout, I am not sure why you have left the double spacing? I hope you are enjoying being a member of Writing.com and happy WDC birthday week    My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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