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 | Should've Stayed in Bed  [13+] Some days it doesn't pay to get up.  |
| (4.5)  "Anniversary Reviews" is celebrating A QUARTER CENTURY of Writing.Com! I saw this title and I knew I had to check it out. We've all had those days were we should have stayed in bed! This is a light-hearted comedic poem about life events gone wrong in such a way you either laugh or cry and just ride out the day and start fresh tomorrow. I liked the humor and human connection in the poem. This is a free form poem with six 4 line stanza and a _A_A rythme scheme. There is enough of rhythm to catch the beat. I especially loved this descriptive verse: Run to the store for a minute, Painting cans left close to the door. I return to find she's painted White paws all over the floor. This is something we can relate to. You do an errand, think you have your bases covered and you come home to find out your dog has been up to mischief! It's a great visual and the reader lets out a collective emotional sigh when their done reading it. The title is spot on and a good lure to draw a potential reader in. My only suggestion would be to even out the rythme scheme maybe a ABAB CDCD to even it out and make they rhythmic beat a little bit more solid. Overall, a fun read. I'm glad I found it! An Angel Army March Anniversary Review
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