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 Battle Open in new Window. [ASR]
A twist on ABCDarian 8 syllable lines 26 words no rhyme.
by des.b Author Icon
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Review by StephBee Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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*Note1* My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.


*Reading* THE POEM

The poem was a look at the toll of battle.

*Idea* WHAT I LIKED

The poet used a good economy of words to paint vivid pictures of battle and how it leaves its mark on society.

*Star* STRUCTURE

This is a free form 8 line poem with no rythme scheme.

*Star* MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. If anything, I would suggest using WDC ML to make the font a little bigger.

*Star* DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "Bewildered beasts, bolted blood bath," The poet uses alliteration all throughout the poem, with a focus on the "B." It seems to work with the word "battle" at the forefront.

*Star* PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening sets the stage for the poem and what to expect from it. Battle isn't pretty. The title suits the poem. A hard look at a facet of life that does more harm than good. The expression is hard, but appropriate for the poem.

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