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The Sandbox of Eden Open in new Window. [E]
A boy and his grandfather find a birthday gift is so much more than it seems.
by audra_branson Author Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Greetings, Audra!

Aww, this is such a beautiful story, a powerful exploration of the strength of family love and imagination. The gap between old and young is bridged, and it shows us how the grandpa is truly young at heart. He wants the best for his grandson, and that includes making sure his imagination is fed in the healthiest way possible.

I noticed when the magic happens, you shift from writing in the first person, from the grandpa's point of view, to writing in the third person, showing us the emotional reactions and thoughts of all involved. You may want to decide between the two perspectives, and yet there is also something perfectly magical about the shift that makes sense in the context of the setting.

I would recommend enlarging the font to create the best reading experience across devices; I always go with Size 4 Verdana.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *WingL**Heartv**WingR*


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