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 The Art of Reconstruction  Open in new Window. [E]
Originally appeared in White Wall Review
by Sam Author Icon
Review by LdyPhoenix Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)
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[ First Thoughts ]

          Grief is such a complicated emotion. People want to make it better by pushing it away, but some things need to be felt. This poem definitely makes me feel, particularly when it comes to masking the truth to make it more palatable for others. I was shaken by the intensity and drawn to the stark reality that this poem presented. You brought to the surface the difficulties of loss and expressing that heartache for others to witness. Sometimes kindness is its own kind of anguish.

[ Errors ]

         I could find no grammatical errors. Well done! *ThumbsUpGreen*

[ Suggestions ]

         The structure of this poem serves the emotions within well. I have no notes or suggestions.

[ Favorite Line/Segment ]

"I’d break my bones and use them to build a bridge to the past
if it were possible."


         The entire stanza feels tremendously vivid as it is painful. Each line is gripping, but the one I highlighted really made me feel the most intensely. The complexity of feeling grief so deeply, to try and keep the memories before that death close, yet needing to wrap those feelings in something more palatable for others to see.

[ Conclusion ]

         This poem is a raw and profound piece about grief and the connections we try to hold onto when it comes to the past while also trying to manage other people's expectations. It has been a long time since I've felt this heartrendingly touched by a poem.

         Thank you for sharing this wonderful work. Write on!


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