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A Squirrel Named Larry  [E] An enterprising squirrel and his family move into an apartment windowsill...  |
| (4.0)| Hello Amethyst Autumn Angel This is a cute story about a squirrel family that chooses the space between a fifth floor window and its protective iron grate as a nesting spot. The interactions of Myra and the many animals is fun to watch. It's not clear from the story why Myra can't explore as much as she wants. That part starts the story out on an almost ominous tone. At the end, Myra is a normal kid that goes to school and has friends and relatives over. So, there is a little dissonance between the beginning and the ending there. Here are my thoughts and observations on the story as I read it: The story begins with a very classical descriptions of the country and town and house that Myra lives in. Are you sure about the passive voice here? To Myra's sharp eyes, there was always something new to be seen from her window. It feels like that angle gives Myra too much to see. It's more of a bird's eye view than that of looking of one window, even if her window overlooks an intersection. There were bustling city streets This was strange. As if Myra is in the oven with the pie. Maybe she wakes up to the scent or smell of pumpkin pie? One morning Myra awakened to the warmth of pumpkin pie in the oven. I'm mostly curious if this is realistic. Is it the male squirrel who builds the nest? Wouldn't it be a female trait? I'm not looking it up, but as the writer, you might want that small detail to be true to life. Larry became quite industrious. He made hundreds of trips up and down the wall, bringing materials for his nest. Strange line break after the comma: cheeks-ful of nuts, seeds and berries Overall, a fun read. Just watch out for passive voice and maybe check for the nature facts to make them scientifically sound.  My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Get CASH!" .
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Annette 
You responded to this review 10/26/2025 @ 3:02pm EDT