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Le Voyage Magnifique

by Dave

Rated: 18+ · Book · Writing · #1236257

A log of the magnificent journey across the vast sea of my imagination.

A sig awarded for winning "The Anything Goes Poetry Contest"

A log of our magnificent journey.

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10 Most Recent Blog Comments:

Soldier_Mike

Apr 18, 2025 at 11:44pm
In response to "Military "Brat""

All four of my daughters were vets from the moment of birth. They were all born while I was on Active Duty, were born in Army hospitals, and bounced back and forth between the U.S. and West Germany with their mom and me (the eldest ones more than once).

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Dave

Sep 18, 2024 at 2:09pm
In response to "The Call"

Yes, a blending of recent newscasts inspired this one.

Kåre เลียม Enga

Sep 17, 2024 at 2:22pm
In response to "The Call"

Ouch. Too real for me today. I was homeless years ago and Montana has a high vet population struggling with personal issues. This literally could be today's headlines here.

1 Like

AnotherDreamer

Aug 26, 2024 at 3:19pm
In response to "Smorgasbord"

Thank you for reminding me. I can almost taste the salt in the air from here

1 Like

StephBee

Jun 4, 2024 at 6:51pm
In response to "Military Mom"

My comment is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The poem is a nice tribute to a military mother.

WHAT I LIKED

I can totally relate to this poem having served in the military myself. There are often times one worries and finds things to pass the time, but their loved one is never far from their hearts.

STRUCTURE

This is a villanelle. A villanelle is a highly structured poem with 5 tercets and ends with a quatrain. There are 2 repeating rythmes and 2 repeating refrains. The poem followed the structure. I thought the repeating refrains were very respectful and reverent. There's a nice rythme and flow when spoken outloud.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase font and make easier to read on the website.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: With steadfast devotion, she prays to relieve the anxiety" The description draws up a visual of a mother, prayerful, with a holy book, or a passage, heart on their sleeve, looking to find peace. It's a great description and taps into somber emotion well.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader. The title is a nice fit for the poem. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.

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StephBee

Dec 7, 2023 at 9:47pm
In response to "Thanksgiving Restoration"

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

Inspired by a quote from Henry van Dyke, the progresses from feeling, to expression to action inspired by a thanksgiving gathering.

WHAT I LIKED

I like how each stanza started with "I'm thankful for..." The repetition was as soothing as the sentiments expressed.

STRUCTURE

As per the notes, this is loosely based on a monchielle styled poem.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any punctuation mistakes. The poem is easy to read.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: "the smell of Grammy's turkey dressing,"

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The poem progresses much like van Dyke's quote, from feeling to expression to action/being in the moment of a thanksgiving gathering.

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Kåre เลียม Enga

Oct 30, 2023 at 1:36am
In response to "A Halloween Celebration"

Nice rhythm and alliteration! The rhymes work as well. Edit and versify and voila... you have a free-verse poem (or a prose poem) for Shadows & Light.

My dreamy brain... ghoulish? dark? My nightmares are definitely disturbing and don't always dissipate with daylight.

Needless to say, I like it.

Kåre เลียม Enga

May 19, 2023 at 9:25am
In response to "Poppies"

I do like it. The rhythm is nice. I appreciate bravery/Normandy/memory.

"because" doesn't work for me. No suggestions though.

1 Like

StephBee

Jan 5, 2023 at 5:40pm
In response to "SILENT NIGHT"

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM
A poem about the nature of the Christmas season.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked how the acrostic of "silent night" painted the beauty of winter.

STRUCTURE

This is an acrostic poem. It is where the first letter of the line spell out a word or a phrase.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to make the poem easy to read. Good use of WDC ML.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

I have no other suggestions. Nice word play. You can feel the weather nipping at your cheeks. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.

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Dave

Jan 3, 2023 at 8:32am
In response to "The Gravel Path"

I am glad you posted this on the forum so everyone else can enjoy it.

1 Like

June 26, 2021 at 2:45pm

#1012570

Serendipity

On sunny Sunday afternoon,
summer breeze whispers in my ear
about the pleasures of riding stream
on magic carpet made of wood.

As we glide along the thoroughfare,
bright rays of sunlight dance
upon ripples of pole dipping

dip, drip, drip
dip, drip, drip
dip, drip, drip

generating sense of serendipity
through Mother Nature's serenade.

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June 25, 2021 at 2:06am

#1012489

Playpen

From flying dragons and other
psychedelic relics
to paddy wagons at my ex-lover’s
mountain cabin,
anything can happen
when I allow my muse to frolic
in the playpen
of my imagination.

Notes ▼

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June 22, 2021 at 3:36pm

#1012346

The Power of a Smile

When matters go astray,
like red rose blooming in a field of weeds,
a simple smile will brighten cloudy day
and plant some friendship seeds.

To find a better space
when daily grind begins to wear you down,
just spread your sunshine all over the place
and lose that ugly frown.

Restock your spirit cart
by taking up contrasting attitude.
The more you smile, the more you heal the heart
with dose of mental food.

We must evaluate
to find a more accommodating style
and never, ever, underestimate
the power of a smile.

Notes ▼

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June 21, 2021 at 6:39pm

#1012299

Monday Morning

Alarm goes off.
Another day
is underway
to start the week.

The daily grind
with promise bleak,
it makes me shriek
'til Friday comes.

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June 20, 2021 at 2:35pm

#1012226

The Plot

Our mission called,
but weather had us stalled,
until Eisenhower gave the command.
When ramps went down,
we thought that we would drown
before we could traverse the narrow sand.

We hit the beach
and fought like hell to breach
the enemy's fortified resistance.
For days, the battle wailed,
but our forces prevailed,
thanks to our unwavering persistance.

From bloody plot,
some came back, some did not.
We paid a hefty price for victory
when it was done,
without comparison,
forever etched in tomes of history.

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June 9, 2021 at 6:07pm

#1011565

Refugee

Unsuspecting refugee,
who was yearning to be free
from the grip of tyranny,
paid coyote hefty fee
to avoid authority
on quest to reach boundary.

That was just a fantasy.
They ripped him from family
to raise odds, supposedly,
then left him in jeopardy
and flames of hostility.

Very soon, he came to see
a traumatic tapestry
of emotional debris.
Hunger, heat, and misery
line the trail to liberty,
so he struggled until he
met his final destiny.

Notes ▼

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June 2, 2021 at 3:13pm

#1011176

My Garden

The gentle peace of garden toil,
away from all that social roil,
provides the exercise I need
in tilling soil and planting seed.

My garden is the empty page,
in line with my advancing age.
I'm sowing seeds of poetry
and nurturing their growth with glee.

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