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Le Voyage Magnifique

by Dave

Rated: 18+ · Book · Writing · #1236257

A log of the magnificent journey across the vast sea of my imagination.

A sig awarded for winning "The Anything Goes Poetry Contest"

A log of our magnificent journey.

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10 Most Recent Blog Comments:

Dave

Jul 14, 2025 at 2:41pm
In response to "Buffalo Soldiers"

StephBee

Thank you! It has been fixed.

StephBee

Jul 13, 2025 at 4:29pm
In response to "Buffalo Soldiers"

I really like your poem here - it's a nice tribute to Buffalo Soldiers which is the featured video at the Veterans Group this month. Well done! If anything - I think "soldies" should be "soldiers," if you'd like to fix it.

Smiles
Steph

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Soldier_Mike

Jul 9, 2025 at 11:48pm
In response to "Buffalo Soldiers"

I met a Buffalo soldier once, and I've seen the 10th Cavalry depicted - or at least mentioned - at least once in a novel. Pretty cool history.

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Dave

Jul 2, 2025 at 4:51pm
In response to "Flanders Field"

Thank you! I appreciate that detailed feedback.

StephBee

Jun 30, 2025 at 11:26pm
In response to "Flanders Field"

Thank you for the June 2025 entry for the

FORUM

Honoring Our Veterans - Challenge

(ASR)
Celebrating Veterans Day every day
#423698 by StephBee

It's much appreciated!

My review is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The poem was a respectful tribute for those who have passed away in war. The use of Flanders Field and poppy seeds stirs up images of World War I.

WHAT I LIKED

I liked the compare/contrast of the battlefield to be followed by flowers.

STRUCTURE

This is a free form poem.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC to increase the font and make it red. It made the poem easier to read on the website.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: Along with crimson poppies, military cemeteries appeared," This is a striking visual - where poppies mark a battlefield and a cemeteries and it stirs a sense of gratitude for those who sacrificed.

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Soldier_Mike

Apr 18, 2025 at 11:44pm
In response to "Military "Brat""

All four of my daughters were vets from the moment of birth. They were all born while I was on Active Duty, were born in Army hospitals, and bounced back and forth between the U.S. and West Germany with their mom and me (the eldest ones more than once).

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Dave

Sep 18, 2024 at 2:09pm
In response to "The Call"

Yes, a blending of recent newscasts inspired this one.

Kåre เลียม Enga

Sep 17, 2024 at 2:22pm
In response to "The Call"

Ouch. Too real for me today. I was homeless years ago and Montana has a high vet population struggling with personal issues. This literally could be today's headlines here.

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AnotherDreamer

Aug 26, 2024 at 3:19pm
In response to "Smorgasbord"

Thank you for reminding me. I can almost taste the salt in the air from here

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StephBee

Jun 4, 2024 at 6:51pm
In response to "Military Mom"

My comment is based on professional editing points. It is meant to be honest, encouraging, and respectful in accordance with WDC guidelines.

THE POEM

The poem is a nice tribute to a military mother.

WHAT I LIKED

I can totally relate to this poem having served in the military myself. There are often times one worries and finds things to pass the time, but their loved one is never far from their hearts.

STRUCTURE

This is a villanelle. A villanelle is a highly structured poem with 5 tercets and ends with a quatrain. There are 2 repeating rythmes and 2 repeating refrains. The poem followed the structure. I thought the repeating refrains were very respectful and reverent. There's a nice rythme and flow when spoken outloud.

MECHANICS

I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to increase font and make easier to read on the website.

DESCRIPTIONS

I liked: With steadfast devotion, she prays to relieve the anxiety" The description draws up a visual of a mother, prayerful, with a holy book, or a passage, heart on their sleeve, looking to find peace. It's a great description and taps into somber emotion well.

PARTING THOUGHTS/SUGGESTIONS

The opening engages the reader. The title is a nice fit for the poem. Good luck in the Bard's Hall Contest.

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July 20, 2025 at 5:19pm

#1093781

Under the Apple Tree

I remember when you and me,
sitting under the apple tree,
launched destiny with our first kiss,
and thus began our years of bliss.

Our wedding vows with family,
taken under the apple tree,
secured the bond to last through years
of laughter, arguments, and tears.

Our kids enjoyed their revelry,
running around the apple tree,
zx they matured into adults,
making us happy with results.

So, here we are again, you and me
buried under the apple tree,
together for eternity.

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July 9, 2025 at 1:45pm

#1093103

Buffalo Soldiers

Buffalo soldiers
made their mark in history
showing bravery
and tenaciousness in spades,
despite racial prejudice
and native unrest.
For years of loyal service,
we still salute them.

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