An apple a day....
My house is a complete mess and I am shy to invite people over, so I don't mix with the neighbours. You can't not-invite someone who lives next door if you're friends with them. I know that's silly but that's the eccentricity I have.
My neighbours are SO good to me, helping out when I need them even though that's probably the only time they hear from me. These next door neighbours brought me a Harry Potter planner and a packet of Bertie Botts Beans when they visited Potter World!
I have great neighbors and parents. They are always doing something with their children (a girl 12 and a boy 15), having birthday parties, going to their school games, or just hanging out together...and they both work, one at home, one not. They have pets (cat, turtle, dog) and their children are so polite and considerate. I'm really lucky. And yes, I am somewhat introverted but I try...like you. Hope you have a good day, today and always....Connie
iKïyå§ama - thanks so much for running this activity, for this comment and for the lovely MB!
I'm glad I saw your reminder (I'd missed the first newsfeed post somehow!) and participated.
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THE POEM
This is an acrostic poem with a festivals theme.
WHAT I LIKED
I liked the accompanying video. It helped to frame the poem for me so I had more context and understanding.
STRUCTURE
This is an acrostic poem that used "MADNESS OF MARCH." From Websters: a composition usually in verse in which sets of letters (such as the initial or final letters of the lines) taken in order form a word or phrase or a regular sequence of letters of the alphabet
The poem caught the excitement and fun of the video.
MECHANICS
I did not spot any spelling/punctuation mistakes. Good use of WDC ML to highlight the beginning letters.
DESCRIPTIONS
I liked: "Magical, Mundane, Mysterious, Magnificent," All descriptions in and of themselves, but what visual descriptions and they evoke a lot of emotion from interesting, daring, exhilarating and even a yawn.
Such a sweet little short story; I'm sure the judge had a really difficult time choosing the winner for that edition of "The Writer's Cramp" . Choosing to live alone is one thing, but also having to endure all the memories and recurring events by yourself is tough.
I'm offering these comments on Stay True to Yourself, a fabulous little verse in both senses of the word, which you posted on I Write.
It was a joy for me to savour these words of wisdom, delivered in the indisputably authentic voice of the feathered sage of fable him (or her) self. The rhymes and rhythms are direct and simple, befitting the message they convey and I particularly appreciated your signature touch - 'whooo' - which told me this could only be the work of one poet.
Much enjoyed, as ever, and I wish you success in the contest!
I just listened to a few seconds of the song, to get the idea.
I don't want to listen to more. I'm missing Dad a lot and this sounds like it would trigger me. The title and first few lines made it sound like it's about following someone who dies somewhere - too upsetting a subject in my current mood.
Dad's first death anniversary is coming up on Nov 14. My cousin is asking if I want a family Zoom meeting, but I don't think I want to organise it, nor have her do so for me. It was nice of her to offer, but it's a big task, co-ordinating the different time zones the family lives in.
I want to share so many things with Dad and 'he's watching from Heaven' just doesn't cut it. I want to tell him about my new (part time) job and about my hobby and so many things.
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